It’s best to start at the end of the world.
Among the rubble and ice and fire,
Cities are crushed and children lay curled.
It’s best to start at the end of the world,
Where from ashes a Phoenix rises unfurled,
To nourish the land and people inspire.
It’s best to start at the end of the world,
Among the rubble, and ice, and fire.
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Trying an unfamiliar form for this one, the Troilet, suggested by Yeah Write’s Poetry Slam. So I’m not 100% sure if I got it right but I’m happy with it, somewhat. It was difficult to work with but rather enjoyable all the same 🙂
Writing(s) by Anna 
Nice job with the triolet! Agreed that “children lay curled” is so effective and tragic. The final rhyme of inspire/fire works well, too.
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Yes, I agree with Amy Bee and Hema above. Word choice created excellent imagery. How did you like the triolet?
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I also like the “children laying curled”. Instantly conveys atrocity.
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I love the imagery of children laying curled. Beautifully done!
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Good job! I find poetry super hard and what I read here is beautiful.
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